I don’t think my opinions are stupid and others do; so it is better to keep them to myself. (Page 102)
What are your thoughts about sharing opinions? Do you agree with Anne, that it is best to keep your opinions to yourself because no one will understand them, or is important to share them nonetheless? Read page 163 before starting this post.1. Write a letter to Anne explaining to her whether you agree or disagree with her. Please explain your answer.
1. Write a letter to Anne explaining to her whether you agree or disagree with her. Please explain your answer.
Dear Anne,
I know where you are, and what your situation is at the present moment, but it is not healthy to keep things locked up inside. I dont think it is the best thing to do right now, with all that you are going through. It is natural to be somewhat expressive and open.
You might stay awake at night thinking about different things that you just can’t get out of your mind. I know that you tell kitty these things most of the time but there are sometimes where you need feed back and kitty can’t give that to you. Some times I know that you want to keep things inside because you are scared about what other people might say, scared they might judge you. Not every one is going to agree or even listen to what you say; it’s just the way life goes sometimes. All you need to do is bring out your ideas and see how people react to them. Different people have different opinions on people’s ideas. Now I know you have tried this on may occasion and I hasn’t gone so well, but ever heard of trial and error?
I totally agree with what you said on Thursday, 2nd March, 1944. I mostly agree with “we aren’t allowed to have any opinions. People can tell you to keep your mouth shut, but it doesn’t stop you having your own opinion. Even if people are still very young, they shouldn’t be prevented from saying what they think.” I completely agree with this. A Lot of the time the ideas of the young population are different and original and could have use to people, so they should be shared. Some adults sometimes think that the opinions of the younger population are silly and don’t really mean anything, when in truth sometimes they do.
Keeping things inside and never sharing them has many different effects on people that can take place now or later in their lives. People who keep things might grow up to be very shy, quiet, and never contribute to the people around them. Another effect could be that they might never be able to really open up to friend, life partners, and close friend. They might think like you think now. “They will think that what I say is stupid” so it is better to start being a little more open now. I am not saying that you have to be completely open about your self and tell every one every single one of your ideas. Take a chance and just see the different reactions people give you, open up to them.
Now I know that you are living with only six other people and that is hard to just talk to certain people when there is no one like you. I feel that you want your mother, and the others to stop treating you like a small child and start treating you like a real person or young adult. Maybe if you make your ideas sound a little older then people might want to listen.
Just try to give your opinions, don’t shut yourself off completely its not good for you. Tell them to Kitty, but also tell them to other people around you, just try Anne, for me.
Ideas and content~ Exeptionally clear, for example, “Just try to give your opinions, don’t shut yourself off completely its not good for you” is straight to the point; however, you may want to think of adding in some examples, maybe of something that once happened to you.
Organization~ Effectively organized and in a very logical order and your conclusion is very nice. Something you may want to change is your introduction it is very hard to see where the introduction starts and where it ends.
Voice~ Your voice is very engaging and extreamly sincere, but as you go down the peice your voice starts getting repetative. Not that doing this is bad for a litle bit, but you might want to change how you word some things, just to spice it up a bit.
Over all~ you may want to read through and edit (there’s a couple “of’s” where there should be “off’s”.
W.C
Your word choice was okay and needed some improvent. For example, you could replace the word alow to permit. YOu can change all your words into more proffesional ones by using the thesaurus. It was still quite good.
S.F
YOur sentence flueancy in the other hand was great. You had a nice flow and rythm and it was easy to read. YOu could still improve on this though, by making sentences really connect. This was one trait you really accuired.
C
Your conventions. they were suitable for school. I didn’t notice any spelling mistakes(not that there are any)So tis means that your letter was great! Good job and i ihop you continue writing like this.
In the first paragraph, “but it is not healthy to keep things locked up inside. I don’t think it is the best thing.” Maybe in the second thing you could use the words way to deal with… I really agree with how you phrased that when people don’t always listen to you it’s just part of life and how it’s better to open up your ideas now, while your young, because side effects could include complexes and isolation. Maybe instead of using the word “sometimes” all the time, you could use on of these: From time to time, occasionally, or at times. I have no other suggestions for word choice. Your words seemed to have been carefully chosen and energize the writing.
Well done on this trait! I wrote down some sentences though that you might want to “fluenthesyz” (I know that’s not a word). They might think like you think now,—-They might think the way you do now.(Line 25) Now I know that you are living with only six other people and that is hard to just talk to certain people when there is no one like you. This sounds like you need a coordinating conjunction at the end of this sentence. Maybe you could vary the pattern of the beginnings of your sentences. Very good craftsmanship!
Conventions! Here, I’ll simply tell you the word and line so you can consider correcting it: 11, occasion—occasions, and I—it.
25, friend—friends
These paragraphs were inspiring and meaningful, I’m sure if Ann could have received this letter, she would have been delighted. You had exceptionally strong control of conventions of writing. Good Job!
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Ideas and content~ Exeptionally clear, for example, “Just try to give your opinions, don’t shut yourself off completely its not good for you” is straight to the point; however, you may want to think of adding in some examples, maybe of something that once happened to you.
Organization~ Effectively organized and in a very logical order and your conclusion is very nice. Something you may want to change is your introduction it is very hard to see where the introduction starts and where it ends.
Voice~ Your voice is very engaging and extreamly sincere, but as you go down the peice your voice starts getting repetative. Not that doing this is bad for a litle bit, but you might want to change how you word some things, just to spice it up a bit.
Over all~ you may want to read through and edit (there’s a couple “of’s” where there should be “off’s”.
W.C
Your word choice was okay and needed some improvent. For example, you could replace the word alow to permit. YOu can change all your words into more proffesional ones by using the thesaurus. It was still quite good.
S.F
YOur sentence flueancy in the other hand was great. You had a nice flow and rythm and it was easy to read. YOu could still improve on this though, by making sentences really connect. This was one trait you really accuired.
C
Your conventions. they were suitable for school. I didn’t notice any spelling mistakes(not that there are any)So tis means that your letter was great! Good job and i ihop you continue writing like this.
In the first paragraph, “but it is not healthy to keep things locked up inside. I don’t think it is the best thing.” Maybe in the second thing you could use the words way to deal with… I really agree with how you phrased that when people don’t always listen to you it’s just part of life and how it’s better to open up your ideas now, while your young, because side effects could include complexes and isolation. Maybe instead of using the word “sometimes” all the time, you could use on of these: From time to time, occasionally, or at times. I have no other suggestions for word choice. Your words seemed to have been carefully chosen and energize the writing.
Well done on this trait! I wrote down some sentences though that you might want to “fluenthesyz” (I know that’s not a word). They might think like you think now,—-They might think the way you do now.(Line 25) Now I know that you are living with only six other people and that is hard to just talk to certain people when there is no one like you. This sounds like you need a coordinating conjunction at the end of this sentence. Maybe you could vary the pattern of the beginnings of your sentences. Very good craftsmanship!
Conventions! Here, I’ll simply tell you the word and line so you can consider correcting it: 11, occasion—occasions, and I—it.
25, friend—friends
These paragraphs were inspiring and meaningful, I’m sure if Ann could have received this letter, she would have been delighted. You had exceptionally strong control of conventions of writing. Good Job!